Some people sat that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

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of
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have an opinion that guardians should encourage their kids to utilise their leisure
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by enrolling themselves on social or
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activities.
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some
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has counter argue that it is crucial for
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to learn how to occupy themselves in their personal life. I personally believe in the second set of
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, both my view and my inclination will be discussed
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in
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essay. The first set of
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has many reasons why parents should encourage their
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to participate in
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activities. Mainly, leisure
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is a great choice to engross the
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development of
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should develop themself socially too, not only studying will help them to become good team players and good human beings but
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to develop that quality in a child parents should tell him to rather become lonely, go outside, make friends or join a club. In
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way,
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can learn from other
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and develop some social norms and reduce their self-centred nature. Still, I do not agree with
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set of
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. On the other side, some
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believe that
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should occupy themself with their own useful tasks because by doing so they can be more productive. If kids would spend their
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studying well or learning some indoor skills
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as cooking, reading or playing indoor games with siblings
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they can be more personalised rather be less focused by participating in
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activities.
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, to be personalised
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can obey their parents' instructions and can not have bad habits by following peers in a
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, which
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makes them productive by not wasting their
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on unuseful tasks
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as gossiping with friends or criticizing someone.
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, my inclination with
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is because being more centralized and personalised can help a child to learn how to value their precious
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. In conclusion,
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being social and being a team player can be learned by participating in a
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activity, making an effort in a personalised development keep
children
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focused and productive.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • occupied
  • organized
  • group activities
  • benefits
  • social
  • teamwork skills
  • interpersonal skills
  • friendship
  • discipline
  • time management
  • interests
  • hobbies
  • independent play
  • creativity
  • problem-solving skills
  • self-reliance
  • explore
  • discover
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