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The pie chart below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island , according to a survey of Visitors . Summaries the information by selecting and re reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant .

The pie chart below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island , according to a survey of Visitors . Summaries the information by selecting and re reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant .
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The pie chart illustrates Bowman
Island
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's most common merits and demerits
according to
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 the survey.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the major advantage is contributed by humans,
as well as
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, the scenery.
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, the major disadvantage is caused by the high cost of living and entertainment.
To begin
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 with, the major benefit of the
island
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 is the humans. They occupied 42 per cent of benefits to the region.
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,
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nature takes the second advantage
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 the research it has 35 rates of the votes. Good accommodation is
also
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 another merit of the area, and 15% of visitors voted for it.
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, the tradition of the city is the least advantage voted by the tourist.
On the other hand
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, the major demerit of the
island
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 is the high cost of living it covers half of the disadvantages.
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, 25 rate of visitors say entertainment is
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 a major threat.
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, the next problem
according to
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 research is the weather only 15% of people voted for it.
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, the least problem is food, fewer people dislike the cuisines of the
Island
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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