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The two maps illustrate an island, before and after the building of some benefits for tourists.

The two maps illustrate an island, before and after the building of some benefits for tourists.
The two maps illustrate an
island
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, before and after the building of some benefits for tourists. In general, we can notice that before the construction that was just
uninhabited
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an uninhabited
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island
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 without any life conditions.After, it turned into
the
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a
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 rural landscape with some infrastructure. It could be plainly viewed that
main
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the main
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 feature
appeared
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that appeared
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 after
building
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the building
a building
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 is the residential houses located near each other.
In
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addition
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,addition
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 there were made two different
type
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types
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 of pather for people and vehicles.People arrive
to
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on
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 the
island
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 on the boats and stop beside the pier, which is located in the south.Now, they have
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to reach the reception
on
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in
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 the car and have a meal in
restaurant
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a restaurant
the restaurant
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.Both of them are placed in the centre of the
island
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 between the houses. Now, turning to the details it is noticeable that after adding the facilities there is allowed swimming for
the
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apply
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tourists on the beach which is located on the west side of the coast.Surely they can get there through the footpath .Palms still keep to stay
on
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in
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 their places without any changes.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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