At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adult, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantage of this situation outweigh the disadvantage?

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people population is increase compared to older people

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states

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have two sides

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advantages

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and

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Advantage

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and

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are

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described

in the blow

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paragraphs

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adults numbers are increasing day-by-day have so many benefits like new things are being produced.

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group of

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children

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difficut

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difficult

to run the nation. Old society

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less information than

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great

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profited for

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the nation

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china

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have

less

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chidren

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children

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have less helpful.

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, as old groups have reduced which have

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benefits like the information about past days are

also

reducesing

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reducing

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less group

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fewer groups

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oldage

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old age

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data about

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will be less.

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india

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India

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have

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children

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old group and

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india

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is developing

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high

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rate which is good for

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country.

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apply

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children

are developing new-new things which help a community to do work

easy

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and fast so, in

this

way

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apply

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children

are more benefited

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community above 50+.

Goverment

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develpoing

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developing

new things. By old

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generation

genretion

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there are so many usefulness the nation

such

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exporting

goods and services. In conclusion, the public is more helpful for a

countries

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country's

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growth.

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, both are good for a

countries

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growth

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old

as well as

new

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public.

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form

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from

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the above information

it is clear that

more population of kids

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advantage

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than old population.

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demographic trend
dependency ratio
workforce sustainability
economic burden
innovation
technological advancement
cultural dynamism
social changes
education and training
infrastructure strain
employment opportunities
youth unemployment
investment in youth
productive workforce
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