At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adult, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantage of this situation outweigh the disadvantage?

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people population is increase compared to older people
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have two sides
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and
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and
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are
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adults numbers are increasing day-by-day have so many benefits like new things are being produced.
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group of
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children
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children
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less information than
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generation which
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great
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profited for
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. Support a country like
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China
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have
less
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fewer
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chidren
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children
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have less helpful.
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benefits like the information about past days are
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reducing
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fewer groups
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of
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old age
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data about
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will be less.
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india
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India
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have
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more
children
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then
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old group and
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india
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is developing
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high
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rate which is good for
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country.
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a
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apply
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children
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are developing new-new things which help a community to do work
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and fast so, in
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children
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are more benefited
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community above 50+.
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developing
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generation
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there are so many usefulness the nation
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expoting
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exporting
goods and services. In conclusion, the public is more helpful for a
countries
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growth.
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growth
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old
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new
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the new
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public.
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form
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the above information
it is clear that
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more population of kids
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has
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more
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advantages
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than old population.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic trend
  • dependency ratio
  • workforce sustainability
  • economic burden
  • innovation
  • technological advancement
  • cultural dynamism
  • social changes
  • education and training
  • infrastructure strain
  • employment opportunities
  • youth unemployment
  • investment in youth
  • productive workforce
  • aging population
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