the charts below show the internet use in different purposes in Australia in 2010,2011 and the percentage by users .

the charts below show the internet use in different purposes in Australia in 2010,2011 and the percentage by users .
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The bar chart illustrates the different purposes of internet usage in Australia in the years 2010 and 2011.
Overall
, it can be seen that there are numerous purposes of the internet by users in the country.
However
, the top three necessaries of utilizing technology are Social media, Paying online bills and Emailing.
Nevertheless
, Emailing has a majority of users in the period.
To begin
with, Social
media
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media's
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overall
usage is 40% of the population.
In addition
, the number of teenagers who use news platforms is at a peak .
Moreover
, the citizen who is below the
age
of thirty is slightly utilising social television platforms,
as well as
, it had a fall trend.
Also
, paying online bills is utilised by the population in Australia.
However
, old aged people access it more than compare to the middle
age
humans and the young generation.
On the other hand
, 70 per cent of humans in the country mostly use email.
Furthermore
, the emails had an upward trend but fluctuate
according to
age
.
In addition
, 80 % of citizens who are under 50
age
and above 70
age
use email for their respective purpose.
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