In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything of they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this massage?

Nowadays, the ways of living are different in various countries, it is a dept that culture has changed in
this
location.
One
of these affections of culture
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is told that children and
people
who
work
hard and try too much would be successful as as they did. These words might play negative or significant positive roles in children's life
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since I will argue about
this
topic whether
this
plan is good or not and explain my opinion on it. On the
one
hand, in my ,opinion when
people
live in
one
location, the culture of
this
place set the type of their living that was the best way for
people
who live from old day to now,
hence
these
people
do these rules and they pleased.
For instance
, in my home ,town young
people
live by trying hard and everyone believes that it works. They try for everything in their life and give their effort.
On the other hand
, I think if
people
do it extremely, it might bring disadvantages.
For example
, if
one
child is for something or he does not have, try more than that he or she can, may can not get his her or goal. In
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,
this
work
can not always bring happiness since if you do not successful after a lot of effort, you think that it can not
work
and you feel depressed.
To sum up
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we can not trust every pattern that
people
in the past created hance
at the end
of our
work
, it might be finished badly or winly. On the whole, in our ,choices if we focus on our ability and
work
on it, it always is a win.
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  • Challenges
  • Unrealistic Expectations
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