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The bart chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The bart chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
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the above illustration compares the precise details of the spending by families on a weekly basis. two different years have been chosen to make a comparison of various expenditures.
firstly
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, food which is an inevitable thing in everyday life has a dominant expenditure when compared with the rest. in 1968 spending on bread was almost 35% of one's weekly income and we can see that the graph has reduced to less than 20 which was a great downfall. fuel and power, clothing and footwear and personal goods outlay were reduced in the year 2018 when compared with 1968. housing, transport and leisure had an increase in outgoing in the year 2018.
whereas
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 household goods remain the same in both years.
finally
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, summarising the above table, there were many drastic changes in the
peoples's
Remove the s
peoples'

The word 's is not the correct form for the plural possessive of the noun peoples. Remove the final s.

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 disposal on a weekly income basis

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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