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Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries. Explain the main causes and effects of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions.

#childhood #obesity #countries #effects
As, childhood obesity is becoming a serious
problem
 in many countries so, to control
this
problem
government
 needs to take a possible solution for
this
. Suggest are described is blown.
Firstly
,
as
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apply
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nowdays
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nowadays
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, a
childs
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child
child's
are have
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are had
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 less
kownledge
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knowledge
compare
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compared
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 to older days.
For example
, there are
a
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apply
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kids who
obeing
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belong
 to
there
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their
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 older
generation
. People should
teache
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teach
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a children
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children
a child
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 to
respent
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respect
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a teachers
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teachers
a teacher
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.
School
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Schools
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 should give
knowleghe
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knowledge
 to
there
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their
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 a student about helping each other
as well as
 teaching others.
Insitution
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Institution
 should have one
a
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class per
a
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week about the value
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of moral
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moral
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morals
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.
Government
 should help
those student
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that student
those students
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 who are good at moral
value
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values
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.
Hence
,
young
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the young
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generation
are
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is
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 more involved in social
media
governmnet
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government
 should
spared
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spare
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 awareness through social
media
. If
young
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the young
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generation
 will help
old
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the old
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 to get
knowleghe
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knowledge
 about facilities
then
its
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it's
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 good for the
nation
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nation's
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developmnet
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development
as well as
 growth.
Secondly
, there
are
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is
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 so many
reason
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reasons
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by
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for
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which
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apply
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this
problem
is
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apply
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that
such
 as
a
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apply
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children have so much
involved
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involvement
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 in
there
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their
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activity
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activities
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.
For example
,
a
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apply
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kids are
respecting
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respectful
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 less to old people
compare
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less compare
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 to
past
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the past
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due to
 social
media
.
Thirdly
, by giving knowledge about
importance
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the importance
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fora
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for
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education. The reason behind
spoity
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sporty
spotty
there
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their
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 health is social
media
.
Government
 should
premote
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promote
 value-able videos. As the young
generation
 is more involved in
the
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indoor activity
government
 should make some outdoor
activity
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activities
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 more and more. In conclusion, By focusing on the above data
problem
 can be reduced. By taking some suggested solution from above information
this
problem
 can be reduced.
Thus
, by promoting moral value
problem
 can be less.
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