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The pie charts show the results of a survey conducted by a university on the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services.

The pie charts show the results of a survey conducted by a university on the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services.
#show #results #survey #university #students #services
the chart illustrates the
full
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full-time
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time
 and
part
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part-time
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time
students
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students'
student's
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 satisfaction
of
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with
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two
service
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services
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through a university library.
it is clear that
,
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apply
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the percentages
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of
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students
are
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who are
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 satisfied with current opening
hours
be
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to be
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highest
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the highest
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while
students
 who are IT supported offered
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to
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be lowest. Looking at the pie, the rate of
full
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full-time
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time
students
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who
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are satisfied with
current
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the current
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 opening
hours
be
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is
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 67% highest than
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the
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Students'
Student's
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Students
 IT support offered
12
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at 12
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%.
meanwhile
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,meanwhile
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 the figure for IT support offered and current opening
hours
 are 32%. at the same
tim
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time
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,
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just 13%
students
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of students
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studuying
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studying
 full
time
 were not satisfied with
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the Current
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 opening
hours
. As can be
seem
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seen
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 from the pie, the proportion of
students
 who are very satisfied with
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the
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current opening
hours
were
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was
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 72%
comepare
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compared
compare
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to
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20%
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part-time
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part
time
part
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part-time
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time
students
 be lowest
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at
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about 52%. Only 23% and 35%
part
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part-time
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time
students
 are quite satisfied with
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the
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IT
supoorted
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support
supported
 offered and current opening
hours
. the figure for
students
 not at all satisfied were 45% and 5% respectively
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, part, students, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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