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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps show a
park
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 called Grange
Park
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, which the differences between when it was opened in 1920 and how the
park
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 now is.
Overall
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, the
park
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 has been refurbished to an updated layout, and the modern facilities significantly replace the natural features. It is
also
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 noticeable that new facilities are tuning the
park
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 to become more accessible and functional. There have been changes remarkably since it opened in 1920,
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 only the entrances on both Arnold Avenue and
Eldon
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Street
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 and the
Rose
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Garden
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 which is located near the exit on Arnold Avenue remain unchanged in these years. Entering from the
entrance
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 of
Eldon
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Street
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, the centre of the
park
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 was previously a Fountain, which now is replaced by a
Rose
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garden
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 in square sized surrounded by seats. The Glasshouse which was located at the right of the
entrance
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 on
Eldon
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Street
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, it is now made way to a Water feature.
Besides
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 the Glasshouse, an
entrance
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 for the underground car
park
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 is added, and the seats are removed to make way for it. On the left side of the
park
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, a
Rose
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garden
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 near the
entrance
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 on
Eldon
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Street
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 is removed. Meanwhile, a Stage where for musicians was renovated to become an Amphitheatre where now for concerts. Opposing the water feature, a café and a Children’s play area have taken the place of the
Rose
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Garden
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 and the Pond which was for water plants, which is near the
entrance
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 to Arnold Avenue.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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