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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people have a view that universities should equalize the population of two genders in every subject. From my point of view, I completely agree with
this
 statement.
Firstly
, both men and women should have opportunities to choose what major they want. If there is a restriction made
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 the different
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 of the genders, it can make
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dissatisfaction
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 the restricted gender and lead to some social problems. Meanwhile,
this
 is a good chance for everyone to discover themselves,
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 their talents or suitable roles by
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 numerous subjects with the encouragement of schools and universities.
Secondly
, having equal numbers of male and female
students
 in a class will increase the communication and teamwork skills of both genders. It will be easy to have a group that has both male and female
students
 and they will know how to work with other gender.
This
 is a great preparation for
students
while
 many jobs and companies that require
male
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female
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work
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 together. In conclusion, there are numerous advantages when universities accept having equal numbers of male and female
students
 in every subject.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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