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Currently, many people fail to balance the work with the other parts of lives, what are the reasons and how to solve it?

#people #balance #work #parts #lives
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It is certainly true that today many individuals struggle to make
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a work-live
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work-live
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work-life
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balance
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. There are different reasons why
people
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 face difficulties to achieve
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work
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-life
balance
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 including, overtime at
work
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, and
traffic
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 jams,
however
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, there
some
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are some
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mesaures
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measures
can
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 taken by
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companies
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 to mitigate
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reduce
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reducing
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the
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work
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hours
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, and
allow
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employees
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 to
work
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 online. On the one hand, the primary reason why
people
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 suffer to accomplish
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work
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-life
balance
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 is too much
work
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hours
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. To
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,
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most
employees
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work
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 for long
hours
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 and even overtime.
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,
employees
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 do not have
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 to spend with their families and to do leisure
activites
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activities
.
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 congestion is another reason why
people
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 encounter challenges to achieve
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work
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-life
balance
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.
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 spend a considerable
time
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to
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commuting from their home to
work
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result
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resulting
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of
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high-volume-
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high volume traffic
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traffic
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.
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,
people
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 will waste their
time
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 in
traffic
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 jams
instead
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 of
spend
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time
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 with their families or life activities .
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, there are several actions
can
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taken
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 by the
companies
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 in order to alleviate
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 problem. The first effective solution, the
companies
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 could set limits for
work
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hours
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.
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companies
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 make maximum
hours
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 for their workers
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48
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 per
a
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week, which
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 policy give
employees
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 more
time
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 to spend with their families or life activities.
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 telecommuting is another efficient way to
to
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mitigate
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 issue. In
the
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other words,
the
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apply
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companies
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 could allow their
employees
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 to
work
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 online from their homes in order to alleviate travelling
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 from home to
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, which
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can create more free
time
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 for
people
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.
To sum up
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, There are several reasons why
people
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 encounter challenges to
accomlish
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accomplish
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work
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-life
balance
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 including,
overhours
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over hours
overhears
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work
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 , and
traffic
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 congestion,
however
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, there
some
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 solutions
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that
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can
taken
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 by
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companies
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 to tackle
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such
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minimize
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 the
work
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hours
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,
motivate
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remotely
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work
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