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the map a below shows the ground floor of a particular art gallery in 2005. plan b shows the same area in the present day. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the map a below shows the ground floor of a particular art gallery in 2005. plan b shows the same area in the present day. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate the differences in planning
gallery
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 in the year 2005 and its current form.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the plan replaced
exhibition
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 room 4 with an interactive kid's
area
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, temporary exhibitions were added,
while
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exhibition
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 rooms 1,2 and 3 remain in the same place and have no changes. Currently, the art
gallery
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 comprises three different
exhibition
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 rooms and one for temporary designs , a spacious entrance hall with a reception desk that was placed in the centre of the ground floor, a
gallery
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 shop, vending machines and an
area
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 for children. In 2005 there was a cafe and a shop that has been replaced by a
gallery
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 shop. At the same time, the
gallery
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 office was demolished and three vending machines were added in the northwest of the ground floor. Stairs to the upper floor are
more
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narrow compared with 2005 and next to them one lift was added. Near the
entrance
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 there can be noted that a ramp to wheelchairs appeared.
According to
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 the map, the fourth
exhibition
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 room was converted into an interactive
area
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 for children.
In addition
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, the
area
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 with contemporary exhibitions was added on the west of the entrance hall.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gallery, exhibition, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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