Central and local governments make a frantic attempt to promote festivals to create a lot of revenue. Some people think this money should be invested in social programmes for the poor. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer.

It is considered that central and local authorities try to create festivals to get a lot of income.
This
money is believed to be invested in social programmes for
people
living under the poverty line.I mostly agree with
this
statement and
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this
essay will give some arguments to back up my position.
To begin
with,it is morally right to help poor
people
.
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,even in the Quran and
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it says that we need to do our best to provide some help to needy
people
.Afterwards ,when you help someone,there will be
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senescence
of pleasure in your heart,
due to
the fact we were created to play the role of
helpfull
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helpful
people
in someone`s life.
Moreover
,festivals are meaningless spending of the budget,
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whereas
you can help
to
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the citizens of your city.
To conclude
,we need to help other
people
. First of all,there are benefits for
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.
For instance
,if you help the citizens,they will vote for you in the selections.
Furthermore
,other citizens will understand that you are trying to provide them
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,
thus
in the next selections you will have rave reviews from voters and you tend to win.The next stage
,
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is that you might go up by career ladder,because of the fact that
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will witness your milestone and will promote you.
To sum up
,government members will
also
have pluses and positive consequences. In
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conclusion
,it is very
pleasent
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pleasant
pleased
to help other
people
,especially
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them
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who require
for
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it,
also
members of authority will have their benefits.
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,helping poor
people
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government
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will provide
profound
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impact on
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of both sides.I am of the opinion that we should provide more help for
people
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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