IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britain. The police shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisions where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britain. The police shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisions where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The table and pie charts provide information about the 2017-18 police budget in a single area of Britain. The table illustrates the sources of the budget’s funds
while
Linking Words
 the pie charts display where the funds were allocated.
Overall
Linking Words
, there was an upward trend in all sources, with the National Government being the largest funder. In terms of expenditure, salaries remained the primary form. In 2017, the total budget of the police amounted to 304.7
million
Use synonyms
 and increased to 318.6
million
Use synonyms
 in 2018. The majority of
this
Linking Words
 came from the National Government, with an increase from 175.5
million
Use synonyms
 to 177.8
million
Use synonyms
. Of all types of funding, Local Taxes saw the largest growth from 91.2
million
Use synonyms
 to 102.3
million
Use synonyms
whereas
Linking Words
 other sources
such
Linking Words
 as grants accounted for 38.5
million
Use synonyms
, merely 0.5
million
Use synonyms
 more than the previous year. Expenditure mainly comprised salaries for officers and staff,
although
Linking Words
 the proportion decreased from 75% to 69%.
However
Linking Words
, spending on technology almost doubled from 8% to 14% whilst building and transport stayed the same at 17%.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: