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Results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

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The bar graph illustrates the data of observation in six different
cities
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 in Australia
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 as Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane,
Adelaide
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 and Hobart how the
people
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 taking and consuming
coffee
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 and
tea
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 in the
last
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 four weeks in three different ways including buying fresh
coffee
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, bought instant
coffee
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 and went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in terms of
percentage
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.
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, it can be clearly identified that most of the
people
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 went to cafes for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in each and every city
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 of
Adelaide
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 and almost all
cities
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 showed the least popularity for buying fresh
coffee
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. When we considered the habit of going to the cafe for a
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in the
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 four weeks
people
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 who lived in Melbourne took the highest
percentage
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 nearly sixty-three per cent (63%) and
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 the second and third most popular
cities
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 under the above mention category were Hobrat and Sydney that percentages approximately 62% and 61% respectfully. Brisbane hit the point 55% and
people
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 who lived in
Adelaide
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 represented the least amount among the given six
cities
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 that were nearly 49%. When comparing to the habit of buying instant
coffee
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 it took the second highest option
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 of
Adelaide
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 and Hobart representing the highest amount among all six
cities
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. The
percentage
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 of bought fresh
coffee
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 wasn't popular as the other two types and
people
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people
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 who live in Brisbane was taken the least
percentage
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 and it was nearly 33% and
Adelaide
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 and Horbart had a small rise than Brisbain was 34% and 38% respectively.
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 of these three ,
cities
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people
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 lived in Sydney and Melbourne passed the 40% bought fresh
coffee
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 that
percentage
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 can be mentioned as 42% and 43%
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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