The table shows the proportion of puplis attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The table shows the proportion of puplis attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The table illustrates the four secondary
schools
in which students attend in proportion between 2000 and 2009.
Overall
, it can be seen that the Voluntary-controlled
schools
were at
peak
Correct pronoun usage
their peak
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at the beginning of the period.
Moreover
,
Grammar
Correct article usage
the Grammar
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academy
also
had 24 per cent of pupils in the beginning. In the
end
, Community
schools
had a higher proportion of candidates.
To begin
with, Specialist
schools
had a fall trend during the period.
However
, it had 12% of candidates
at the
end
it had only 10 rate of pupils. Next , Grammar school
also
had a fall variation during the beginning it had 24 rates of students and the ratio of them started to fall off
at the
end
.
On the other hand
, the Vocabulary school had the highest ratio of pupils in 2000 ,
as well as
, it have a fluctuating trend in the middle of the year.
Furthermore
, in the
end
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,end
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it had a proportion of 20% of them in secondary
schools
.
In addition
, Community had an increased variation in the period. In the year ,2000 it had only 12% of the ratio ,
as well as
, it dramatically rise and had 58% of them.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, as well as, at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, end with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.

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