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The table shows the proportion of puplis attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The table shows the proportion of puplis attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The table illustrates the four secondary
schools
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 in which students attend in proportion between 2000 and 2009.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the Voluntary-controlled
schools
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 were at
peak
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their peak
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 at the beginning of the period.
Moreover
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,
Grammar
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the Grammar
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 academy
also
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 had 24 per cent of pupils in the beginning. In the
end
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, Community
schools
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 had a higher proportion of candidates.
To begin
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 with, Specialist
schools
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 had a fall trend during the period.
However
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, it had 12% of candidates
at the
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end
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 it had only 10 rate of pupils. Next , Grammar school
also
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 had a fall variation during the beginning it had 24 rates of students and the ratio of them started to fall off
at the
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end
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.
On the other hand
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, the Vocabulary school had the highest ratio of pupils in 2000 ,
as well as
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, it have a fluctuating trend in the middle of the year.
Furthermore
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, in the
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end
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,end
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 it had a proportion of 20% of them in secondary
schools
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.
In addition
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, Community had an increased variation in the period. In the year ,2000 it had only 12% of the ratio ,
as well as
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, it dramatically rise and had 58% of them.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, as well as, at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, end with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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