In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvanatges of giving children this message.
In numerous cultures, young people are often encouraged by adults that they can achieve something if they try to make
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Firstly
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children
may not give up easily when they face obstacles by remembering that one day they will achieve anything as long as they try hard enough. Use synonyms
For instance
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children
will prepare for school exams optimally despite the difficulties when they want to get a good grade in their school. Use synonyms
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children
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is also boosted
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that they will achieve everything they want as long as they put all of their Add a missing verb
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efforts
to
their goals.
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give
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efforts
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children
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children
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factors
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children
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To sum up
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disadvantages
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young individuals that they can achieve something if they make maximum Change preposition
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children
gain confidence and do not give up easily, Use synonyms
while
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depressed after facing failures and they will not believe in unchanged Correct your spelling
feel
factors
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