In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvanatges of giving children this message.

In numerous cultures, young people are often encouraged by adults that they can achieve something if they try to make
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benefits and drawbacks of providing
children
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view. On the one hand, there are a couple of advantages
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providing hard work value to
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children
.
Firstly
,
children
may not give up easily when they face obstacles by remembering that one day they will achieve anything as long as they try hard enough.
For instance
,
children
will prepare for school exams optimally despite the difficulties when they want to get a good grade in their school.
Secondly
,
children
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also
boost when they
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that they will achieve everything they want as long as they put all of their
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to
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their goals.
On the other hand
, possible disadvantages should be considered when adults
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aforementioned
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message. Young people may feel depressed when they face some failures after lots of
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they do.
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capacity of every child is different,
thus
it is not fair to
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the same perspective
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all
children
.
Moreover
,
children
may not believe there are other
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destiny, the environment,
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opportunity. Those
factors
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by them.
Therefore
, it is not
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choice to cultivate a hard value without considering other
factors
that
children
cannot change.
To sum up
, advantages and
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disadvantages
should be
considerd
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considered
when talking about cultivating a perspective
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young individuals that they can achieve something if they make maximum
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. The positives are
children
gain confidence and do not give up easily,
while
negative points are they
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depressed after facing failures and they will not believe in unchanged
factors
.
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