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In some countries, the use of renewable energy sources is being encouraged. Is it a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is a growing number of
countries
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 that encourage citizens to
use
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 renewable
energy
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 in their lives. Despite some opponents arguing that
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encouragement should not be promoted, I believe that using renewable
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 sources will benefit our lives in
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 long term.
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 with, it is admittedly that installing equipment for the
use
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 of renewable
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 may become a financial burden to governments. Renewable
energy
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 is regarded as a new development of technology, and with the immature technique, it is reasonable to pay a high price to acquire the technique and cultivate workers to support the industry.
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, in developing
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, it is common that they do not catch up with stage-of-the-art technology.
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, many of these poverty-stricken
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 rely heavily on agriculture.
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, they may find difficulty in developing renewable
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 resources since the insufficient fundamental facilities and a lack of financial budget.
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, I suggest that the advantages of using renewable
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 will outweigh its disadvantages if we put it in the long term.
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,
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 kind of
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 can reduce air pollution and decrease noise pollution. To illustrate, burning
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 is not only the main reason to produce greenhouse gases
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 but
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 the biggest element to make noise pollution.
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,
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 are not unlimited sources.
Fuels
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 come from fossil, and there are still a lot of
countries
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 that depend their economies highly on selling fossil
fuels
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. It is possible for them to bankrupt easily if we cannot make
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use
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 of renewable
power
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 worldwide.
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, despite there are still difficulties needed to be conquered, I believe that the
use
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 of renewable
energy
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 sources is a positive development for long-term purposes.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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