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The chart shows the results of the survey about people coffee and tea buying habits in five Australian countries.

The chart shows the results of the survey about people coffee and tea buying habits in five Australian countries.
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The chart illustrates the percentage of
people
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's
coffee
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 and tea purchasing and consuming habits in
Sidney
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,
Melbourne
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, Brisbane,
Adelaide
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 and
Hobart
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 in the
last
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 4 weeks. In terms of
Sidney
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,
Melbourne
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 and
Hobart
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, over 60 % of residents went to a cafe in the
last
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 4 weeks. The proportion of those who consumed instant
coffee
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 in
Hobart
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 (54%) was higher than that of
Sidney
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 and
Melbourne
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 ( 46% and 48% respectively).
However
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, over 40% of citizens in
Sidney
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 and
Melbourne
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 had a habit of buying fresh
coffee
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while
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 38% of
Hobart
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's
people
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 drank it. In the remaining two cities, purchasing fresh
coffee
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 was the smallest percentage ( nearly 35%).The percentage of
people
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 who drank instant
coffee
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 accounted for 53% in Brisbane and 50% in
Adelaide
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. Meanwhile, 48% of
Adelaide
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 residents went to a cafe, and 55% of
people
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 in Brisbane had a habit of going to a
coffee
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 shop.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 going to a
coffee
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 shop was the most common habit except in
Adelaide
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.
Moreover
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, the number of
people
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 who bought fresh
coffee
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 was lower than those who purchased instant
coffee
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee, sidney, melbourne, adelaide, hobart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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