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There are more and more parents working full time. Some people argue that childcare centres are the best in taking care of children of very young age. Others think grandparents are better carer. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is a common belief that
childcare
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 centres are the best places to take care of young
children
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 full-
time
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 when their parents do not have
time
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 to take care of their
children
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.
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, there is a more persuasive argument that
grandparents
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 are better to do
this
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 job as
children
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 can feel safe and improve family bonding. On the one hand,
childcare
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 centres allow
children
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 to develop academically from an early age. Since teachers who are in
childcare
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facilities
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 are all experts at caring, they can provide an advanced education system that fits
children
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's age and levels. In
this
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 regard,
children
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 can achieve a well-rounded education at an early age, which leads to higher academic performance in the future. Take the example of after-school classes in Korea, they offer various kinds of courses and classes
such
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 as English, reading, and sports.
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, baby-sitting
facilities
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 may help
children
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 to grow academically successful.
On the other hand
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, both
children
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 and their parents might feel an emotional sense of security when
grandparents
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 are looking after
children
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.
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, since
children
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 are already familiar with their
grandparents
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, there is no need to have
time
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 for adaptation. It has been reported that
children
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 who grow up with their
grandparents
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 tend to have a more gentle and docile personality as they are emotionally stable.
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, parents do not need to worry about their
children
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 in
childcare
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facilities
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 since some of those
facilities
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 might discriminate against
children
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 by their tastes.
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, spending
time
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 with their
grandparents
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 enables
children
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 to make a great memory with them. In conclusion, in my opinion, the latter view is more persuasive since spending
time
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 with
grandparents
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 is beneficial for
children
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's mental health and personality creation.

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