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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.

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It is discovered that an increase in people who are diagnosed with health issues are using the medicine without a proper meeting with the doctor. I think
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 effect of the product or could they choose a suitable drug for a specific disease. One of the downgrades in
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 tendency is the lack of understanding among folks regarding medication effects.
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, they are unaware of the
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 impact of the medicine they are buying. Since the majority of prescription products always contain
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 effects
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 curing illness, doctors are fully aware of
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 providing useful suggestions for patients on whether or not to consume medicines or advice sufficient amount,
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 having an effective result.
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, people buying and consuming without a doctor's approval would likely use it inefficiently as they could not notice the effect it may bring,
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 more diseases are likely to occur than curing it. Another worth-of-telling dilemma is that they apply less productive medicine to cure the disease. It traced back to low awareness of what actual sickness the afflicted with as they do not have the doctor's certificate and
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 know what the root cause is. Because of that, their health is not just unable to recover but
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 developing illnesses within their body. In conclusion, independently buying medicines is not worth the risk as they could not acknowledge the
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 effect and take the right cure for their condition. So I assume that
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