The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

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pie chart presents the online shopping for retail sectors in New Zealand between the years 2003 and 2013.

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, in 2003, 36% of people used online trade for travel the biggest percentage.

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, in 2013, the largest percentage was chosen by New Zealand people

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online sales for film & music.

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, the biggest fall down in digital shopping for clothes with 8%.

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the least increase in digital trades books is 3%.

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, we can understand from the picture, the biggest rise in digital sales is film&music section with an escalation of 12% in 10 years. All in all,

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books were the least preferred by the New Zealand community in 2003 for online sales after 10 years New Zealand’s least choice is clothes.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Comparative analysis
E-commerce
Retail sectors
Growth rate
Decade
Decline
Trends
Online transactions
Consumer behavior
Market share
Significant increase/decrease
Digital era
Accessibility
User-friendly platform
Market dynamics
Predictive outlook

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The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

Write a letter to a friend. You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. a) apologize for damaging the product b) explain what happened c) say how are you going to fix the issue

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