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In many countries, as people are earning more these days, they are also spending money in buying more and more items. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, the leap in
overall
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 income
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 its byproducts is singled out as a concern preoccupied educationists.
Although
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 it is irrefutable that many drawbacks may derive from
this
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 consuming tendency, I oppose
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 view since the intangible merits can overshadow them.
First,
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earning lucrative revenue is an unattainable target for a country without dynamic transactions. But for drastic consumption, the market would have stagnated, and the economy would sink into atrophy.
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, to spur the growth of the national economy, consumerism must take the lead to cope with the goods' surplus to solve the retail burden.
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, Black Friday and usual discounts are operated to encourage citizens to splurge on excessive items,
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, developed nations
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 as the US or UK can emancipate themselves from fiscal issues.
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as the rise of shopping demand intertwined with better living standard

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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