Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people graviate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products?

The enticing advert of
large scale
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buisnesses
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businesses
, lures a greater percentage of the population to acquire their
products
, irrespective of the fact that
goods
purchased locally may be better.
This
can generate a lot of problems ranging from health
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to financial waste and shall be analysed before drawing a conclusion in
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essay. It is a fact that
goods
, especially edibles, produced
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big companies, usually are overprocessed.
This
is usually to prolong their shelf lives
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and
also
to ensure
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higher returns.
For instance
, packages which have undergone processes in other not to waste when it decays certainly
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lost a lot of nutrients
as a result
, and equally
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preservatives to ensure their longevity. These are pure sources of
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diseases in our society
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and should be curbed by educating the masses on the need to purchase local
products
which present in their natural form and are healthier to the body.
Furthermore
, valuables from these large markets are usually unnecessarily pricy
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and can lead to loss of funds.
For example
, locally made
products
do not have to build
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a lot of expenses into their
goods
, unlike their counterparts who put in expenditures from their advertisement, transport fare etc, increasing the cost of their production and inadvertently the final price of the merchandise. In conclusion, big
buisnesses
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businesses
with rich pockets, easily showcases their
products
to the larger society, robbing their smaller counterparts
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opportunity to
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.
This
is worrisome because
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healthier and cheaper
goods
may easily be acquired locally. It is
therefore
very necessary to enlighten the masses on the advantages of purchasing these
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merchandise.
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