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Many countries are experiencing population growth and need more homes. Should these new home be constructed in existing cities or should new towns be built in the countryside?

#countries #population #growth #homes #home #cities #towns #countryside
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Many nations are experiencing inhabitants growth and need more houses. Should these new
house
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houses
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be
builded
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built
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 in existing urban
areas
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 or should new
towns
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be construct
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be constructed
be constructing
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the
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in the
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 rural
areas
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.
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 I totally believe the construct new
homes
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 should
be build
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be built
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on
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in
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 new
towns
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 in
argicultural
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agricultural
areas
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 because
this
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 trend can contribute to
reduce
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reducing
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population
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the population
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on
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in
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cities
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, and
also
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 enhance the economy in
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countryside
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the countryside
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.
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 with, there are several reasons why I believe that
build
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building
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a new
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a new home
new homes
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homes
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 in new
towns
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 in rural
areas
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 is better than
on
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in
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cities
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.
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, encourage build
a
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of
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 new
homes
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 in rural
areas
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 can contribute to
minimize
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minimising
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 the inhabitant in urban
areas
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.
This
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 is
becaue
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because
 more
people
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 will stay in rural
areas
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instead
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 of
cities
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.
Therefore
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,
this
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 trend can assist to mitigate traffic congestion in
cities
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 result of
reduce
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reduced
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 population, which means less population means
less
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fewer
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 vehicles on the roads.
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, motivate build more
homes
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on
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in
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a new
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new towns
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towns
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 in rural can alleviate the pressure on infrastructure in urban
areas
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 namely,
heathcare
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healthcare
, education,and public transport.
This
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 is
due to
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 the fact that
,
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apply
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 the
inhabitants
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number of inhabitants
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 in urban
areas
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 will reduce. When it comes to rural
areas
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,
constrcut
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construct
 new
homes
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 in
the a
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the
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 new
towns
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 in the
countryside
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 can
boosts
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boost
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 the economy
on
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in
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 the rural
areas
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. To illustrates,
build
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building
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 more
homes
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 in the
countryside
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 will
boots
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boost
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constrction
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construction
 sectors.
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,
constrction
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construction
 companies will provide many
jobs
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job
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opprotunity
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opportunity
 and income for local
people
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.
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,
thosands
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thousands
people
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 will work as engineers,
workers
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and workers
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 in
constrction
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construction
 companies, which means
improve
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improving
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 the living standards of local
people
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in argicultural
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argicultural
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agricultural
areas
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.
To sum up
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, I strongly think the build new
homes
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 should
be build
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be built
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on
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in
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 new
towns
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 in
argicultural
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agricultural
areas
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 because
this
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 trend can contribute to
minimize
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minimising
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 the inhabitants in urban
areas
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 , and
also
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 improve the economy in
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countryside
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the countryside
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.
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