In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In some countries, individuals think it is an obligation to spend a large part of
budget
to improve railway lines and establish fast Add an article
the budget
trains
between Use synonyms
cities
. Use synonyms
Conversely
, other Linking Words
people
think Use synonyms
this
part of Linking Words
budget
Correct article usage
the budget
have
to be spent to improve Change the verb form
has
public
Correct article usage
the public
transport
which is now existing. I personally believe that Use synonyms
money
should be spent on improving Use synonyms
facilities
that now exist.
On the one hand, travelling quickly between Correct article usage
the facilities
cities
with fast Use synonyms
trains
is the thing that some Use synonyms
people
want in order to save Use synonyms
their
Correct pronoun usage
apply
time
and spend less Use synonyms
time
Use synonyms
in
the way and reach their destination quickly. It means by spending Change preposition
on
money
from the government budget to Use synonyms
found
fast Wrong verb form
find
trains
can help Use synonyms
people
to save Use synonyms
their
Correct pronoun usage
apply
time
during their travel between Use synonyms
cities
. Use synonyms
For example
, in Linking Words
Japan
fast Add a comma
,Japan
trains
provide Use synonyms
people
Use synonyms
saving
at least 1 hour Wrong verb form
save
Linking Words
while
they Correct word choice
when
using
these Wrong verb form
use
trains
to travel between Use synonyms
cities
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, Linking Words
these kind
of Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
trains
help Use synonyms
people
to spend less Use synonyms
time
to Use synonyms
reach
their destination and it is very useful because being Wrong verb form
reaching
in
Change preposition
on
a
road can be tedious.
Correct article usage
the
On the other hand
, the viewpoint of other Linking Words
people
is that since we have public Use synonyms
transport
in Use synonyms
city
, we have to invest to improve and boost the efficiency and quality of them. It means Add an article
the city
due to
the fact that public Linking Words
transport
Use synonyms
play
a vital role in commuter daily life, it is necessary to Change the verb form
plays
Improve
their infrastructure. Fix capitalization
improve
In addition
, public Linking Words
transport
is a source of revenue for governments and they can earn Use synonyms
money
from Use synonyms
this
facility. Linking Words
Thus
, it is important to improve and make public Linking Words
transport
better. Use synonyms
Moreover
, it can Linking Words
brings
a sense of satisfaction for Wrong verb form
bring
commuter
and they feel that governments acknowledge their efforts and provide them with their needs to commute to work easily.
In my opinion, since we see some Fix the agreement mistake
commuters
weakness
in Fix the agreement mistake
weaknesses
public
Add an article
the public
transport
system and infrastructure a sizable amount of Use synonyms
money
should be spent to improve these things which Use synonyms
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
also
Linking Words
increase
Change the verb form
increases
the
Correct article usage
apply
society
satisfaction Change noun form
society's
of
governments.
In conclusion, Change preposition
with
although
establishing fast Linking Words
trains
can help Use synonyms
people
save their Use synonyms
time
and energy for some more important Use synonyms
thing
I believe Fix the agreement mistake
things
boost
the quality of public Wrong verb form
boosting
transport
that Use synonyms
existing
now is more necessary.Wrong verb form
exists
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