In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In some countries, individuals think it is an obligation to spend a large part of
budget
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the budget
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to improve railway lines and establish fast
trains
between
cities
.
Conversely
, other
people
think
this
part of
budget
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the budget
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have
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has
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to be spent to improve
public
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the public
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transport
which is now existing. I personally believe that
money
should be spent on improving
facilities
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the facilities
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that now exist. On the one hand, travelling quickly between
cities
with fast
trains
is the thing that some
people
want in order to save
their
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time
and spend less
time
in
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the way and reach their destination quickly. It means by spending
money
from the government budget to
found
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fast
trains
can help
people
to save
their
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time
during their travel between
cities
.
For example
, in
Japan
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,Japan
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fast
trains
provide
people
saving
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save
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at least 1 hour
while
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when
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they
using
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use
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these
trains
to travel between
cities
.
Moreover
,
these kind
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this kind
these kinds
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of
trains
help
people
to spend less
time
to
reach
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reaching
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their destination and it is very useful because being
in
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on
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a
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the
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road can be tedious.
On the other hand
, the viewpoint of other
people
is that since we have public
transport
in
city
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the city
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, we have to invest to improve and boost the efficiency and quality of them. It means
due to
the fact that public
transport
play
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plays
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a vital role in commuter daily life, it is necessary to
Improve
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improve
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their infrastructure.
In addition
, public
transport
is a source of revenue for governments and they can earn
money
from
this
facility.
Thus
, it is important to improve and make public
transport
better.
Moreover
, it can
brings
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bring
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a sense of satisfaction for
commuter
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commuters
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and they feel that governments acknowledge their efforts and provide them with their needs to commute to work easily. In my opinion, since we see some
weakness
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weaknesses
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in
public
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the public
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transport
system and infrastructure a sizable amount of
money
should be spent to improve these things which
it
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apply
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also
increase
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the
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society
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satisfaction
of
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with
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governments. In conclusion,
although
establishing fast
trains
can help
people
save their
time
and energy for some more important
thing
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things
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I believe
boost
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boosting
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the quality of public
transport
that
existing
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exists
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now is more necessary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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