Some believe that going to university is the behile others believe that is it bettest route to a successful career. Wr to start work straight after high school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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it is argued that the best way to be successful in workplaces is
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higher level of education, others believe that finding jobs
subsequently
after finishing high
school
is
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invaluable
. In my opinion, there are fewer satisfactory occupations for high
school
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graduate
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students. Studying at university
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the best way to find a
job
. For achieving a
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or
statisfactory
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satisfactory
job
people need to take courses at academic places.
Job
opportunities like these, usually demand a high level of knowledge. For
instanse
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instance
, experts in many fields must learn how to work with specific
softwares
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software
,
additionally
, individuals working in medical
servises
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services
should have a significant amount of information about diseases, signs, medicine and
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conditions.
In contrast
, some people opine that schoolers must work just after completing high
school
. They believe
adolecents
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adolescents
could learn skills in workplaces better than
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places.
Although
these
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of
job
seekers are able to get some experience, in many cases, these types of jobs are not well enough,
due to
low wages.
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of professions,
on the other
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would be challenging for teenagers, there for attending universities would be the best approach to
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a successful career. In conclusion, despite some
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students should go
for
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work right after finishing high
school
. In my view, for finding a
desireable
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desirable
occupation, taking courses in educational centers is the best method.
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