Some people think that individuals are becoming more dependent on each other in modern society, while others believe that individuals are becoming more independent of each other. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Currently, many
people
agree that individuals are becoming more interdependent in today's society, contrary to them, others believe that individuals are becoming more independent of each other. In
this
article, we will analyze both of these views and see which is better. On the one hand, we can easily see that many
people
still depend on the group as family members.
For example
, from feudal times in Asian countries
such
as Vietnam, Japan, China, North Korea and South Korea, Confucian thought held that many women often stayed at home to take care of their husbands and children,
while
the husband had to earn money to live.
however
,
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think we have many changes to get
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job and make a lot of money.
On the other hand
,
people
believe that the independent rate increased slightly. The independent rate skyrocketed as did the dependency ratio as more industries were opened and
people
got their own jobs.
This
is to say that
people
are not just dependent on other individuals or groups. They have
also
worked in different professions
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interconnectedness
  • globalization
  • digital communication platforms
  • mutual dependency
  • economic globalization
  • international supply chains
  • social validation
  • advancements in technology
  • individualism
  • technological tools
  • smartphones
  • personal computers
  • cultural shift
  • self-sufficiency
  • individualistic attitudes
  • personal achievement
  • self-care
  • interdependency
  • societal structures
  • emotional support
  • underlying foundations
  • human interaction
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