Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, the general
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that they are a person who
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with all
situations
in their
life
, even terrible circumstances. Meanwhile, some people stand on
this
problem, they can’t accept a bad situation and take the bull by the horns to improve
this
event. From my perspective, I see eye to eye with those who believe that should strive to better these
situations
. In
this
essay, I’m going to explain fully about the details. On the one hand, some people are pleased with everything
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life
brings to them. Because they think that change is risky and can cause some problems.
Therefore
, they
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to accept bad circumstances, at least they may feel safer and happier.
For example
, someone who is apprehensive about
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that they
don’t want to spare no
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effort to have a better situation.
Although
they can
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this
task
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way, they still follow the old path. As they
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of
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to
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adjust.
On the other hand
, the general
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public
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that failure teaches success and I’m on the same page with those. It
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evident to
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that we are living in the modern era, thanks to
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of
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who never give up
to make
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on making
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life
better. Without trying and improving
such
situations
, some inventions were never born
such
as
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light
bulbs, electricity, computers or the Internet.
Although
the inventors
also
failed dramatically, they still
make
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an effort to complete
this
invention.
Besides
, they can discover their abilities and improve their skills.
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,
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up in
life
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an important role when we meet
the
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rough
situations
.
To sum up
,
although
there are always exceptions, we can not deny that making changes sometimes
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quite dangerous consequences. What actually matters
would be
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the fact that people should consider carefully prior to changing something.
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coherence cohesion
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  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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