happiness is considered very important in life. why is it difficult to define? what factors are important in achieving hapiness?

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To be prosperous in life, one has to be considerably happy and mentally sound.
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the other hand,is difficult to describe.
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, there are factors
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as mental and physical
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which contribute
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achieving
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. We simply say
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but in depth, it is difficult to fish out
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, as human nature itself is complicated in nature. We question ourselves once, possession of money and wealth
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it is for the time being, with the money people can effort luxury houses, cars and for some even a spouse. But these are for the short term, in the long
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it becomes worrisome. For ,instance you have an expensive car,
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you have to bear
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of losing it to robbers or
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an accident. Can we consider
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wealth as a source of
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it is difficult to define
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. Having said that, there are certain contributing factors to being happy
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as good physical and mental
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. The healthier your physical and mental well-being the happier you will be.
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, a person who maintains a good diet, regularly
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and focuses on their mental training, these people can focus effectively on their daily activities starting from house chores to their jobs. With physical
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they earn for living and mental
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balances the work life and attitude towards limitation for human desire like wanting more.
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,
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is maintained within these people. To conclude
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can be achieved by those who can balance their mental attitude towards desire and their physical
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is maintained.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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