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The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000, | 2023, and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000, | 2023, and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Nowadays, every city is obliged to sell some items or services. Export is an important part
in
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economics
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the economics
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 of a country or a city. Now, I want to compare some export projects in Southland. First of all, we should consider the
income
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 of
most
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the most
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 profitable sphere
the
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international tourism, in 2000's
income
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was
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 about 8 billion pounds per
year
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. Now, we can see the mark of about 9
billions
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billion
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 and by the future
projections
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 it will rise to 10
billions
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billion
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.
Secondly
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, there is another
economics
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 niche - dairy
products
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. At the
beggining
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beginning
 of the
21st century
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 revenue was quite low - 7
billions
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billion
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, nowadays we have 10 billion pounds of
income
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 per
year
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, and experts claim that
this
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 amount will be cut by 500
thousands
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 in 2025th.
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last
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, but not least, is the meat
products
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 sector,
earning
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earnings
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 here there the highest in
2000
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the 2000
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year
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, but in the
progression
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 they are getting lower and lower.
Overall
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,
most
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the most
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 profitable export of Southland is
the
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apply
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international tourism, the next
one
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apply
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niche is
the
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dairy
products
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, earning here have
rose
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risen
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 and will be stabilized.
Also
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, the meat
products
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selling
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 are quite unfunny, because
income
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are
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is
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 getting lower and lower every
year
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, year, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • trends
  • projections
  • categories
  • international tourism
  • dairy products
  • meat products
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • analyze
  • highlight
  • summarize
  • main features
  • comparisons
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