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The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrests.

The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrests.
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The above pie chart shows the percentage of people arrested in five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrests.
Firstly
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, in the pie table, there are two pie charts which describe males and females. In the male there was 32% arrested
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 68% were not arrested. In female, there was 9% arrested and 91% was haven't.
Secondly
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, the bar table shows data about the reason for the most recent arrests in %. Men are less compare to women in they are public drinking around 30% women and men nearly 37%, assault there are women more than 15% and men are 3% less and no answer in girls are less than 5% and boys are nearly 7%.
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, boys are more than girls to drink
while
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 driving both have an 8% difference, Breach of order have a 7% difference, in theft and other reason there is around a 5% difference. In conclusion,
thus
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, the about data show information about girls and boys for arresting reasons.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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