An increasing number of people are choosing to have cosmetic surgery in order to improve their appearance. Why are more people choosing to have operation to change the way they look? Do you think this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Cosmetic
surgeries
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have become quite popular in recent years, as a vast number of
people
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are undergoing these
surgeries
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in order to improve the way they look. Individuals who are choosing these
surgeries
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are mostly because they want to appear flawless and
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, I believe it has apparent negative impacts among those who undergo these cosmetic
surgeries
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.
Firstly
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, As the Modelling Industry is growing at a rapid pace, cosmetic products are
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been made conveniently available to different
people
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as well. As the competition is getting tougher and manipulation of mindset is going on among the
people
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by fabricating that outer beauty is the main reason for
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in life, more
people
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are likely to take cosmetic
surgery
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than the ones who don't care about their appearance.
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, there is
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Ad about a cream where it is portrayed that being more fairer in Skintone means more opportunities in career, which is totally wrong and manipulative to naive
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.
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is consistently telling
people
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that doing a cosmetic operation on themselves will lead to a better lifestyle and
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people
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are lured into cosmetic operations.
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, even cosmetic
surgery
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will lead to negative developments.
People
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who changed themselves purely because they lack confidence will have a fragile confidence after the operation, as it is all attached to the outer appearance and once their appearance is again tormented they will fall into depression.
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, they will care more about other
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's opinions which will make them abide by the other's point of view and they will continuously try to change themselves.
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, A woman from the United States underwent cosmetic
surgery
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because she wanted to look like Actress Angelina Jolie and as the months passed, she
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was unsatisfied with the operation and was clinically depressed.
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I consider that undergoing
surgery
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will have more negative developments on a person's mind and body than positive impacts.
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People
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who are genuinely trying to improve themselves through cosmetic operations just to show that they are perfect will eventually fall into a trap of negative impacts which will slowly start to deteriorate their own peace.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Idealized beauty standards
  • Cosmetic surgery
  • Advancements in medical technology
  • Socially acceptable
  • Self-improvement
  • Psychological well-being
  • Competitive workforce
  • Youthful appearance
  • Body dysmorphic disorder (BDD)
  • Physical appearance
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