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Some believe that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym or health club while others think doing everyday activities. Such as walking and climbing stairs is enough. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is true that the current trend of exercising regularly has been a common sight in our society. Some might argue that joining a fitness centre or a
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 is better to stay healthy
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 others opine that it is more beneficial to keep fit by doing some ordinary activities in our life. On the one hand, doing simple activities enable
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 to stay healthy. It has been reported that just by changing small habits like climbing stairs
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 of using a lift,
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 can not only lose weight but
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 strengthen their muscles. They do not need to spend their money and make extra time to
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, which can give flexibility in their time and schedule.
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, beginners can follow their pace and speed
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 exercising without having to do extremely advanced movements.
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, being a part of a
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club
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 or a gym makes it easier to stay fit. In a gym,
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 can see others who
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 hard, resulting in stronger motivation to do
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.
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,
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 who are not familiar with exercising and do not know about the proper way to do movements with
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 tools can be benefitted from lecturers in a fitness centre. By following a tight
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 course, the public can remain healthy. In Korea,
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, most youngsters today already joined a
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club
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 and do their best to stay fit. In conclusion, in my opinion, I believe that participating in a
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club
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 or going to a gym can be a better option to stay fit and healthy since
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 can follow a well-planned
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 with others.
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