the chart showed the information about the various professtions in the UK and their salaries. The table show the average working hours per week for each professions

the chart showed the information about the various professtions in the UK and their salaries. The table show the average working hours per week for each professions
The bar chart illustrates the number of initial salaries and salaries after
three
years
in the five jobs in the UK, and the table indicates the average working time in
hours
per week for those five experts.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there was not much increase in incomes during the
three
years
for all five occupations.
Also
, it is noticeable that teachers and firefighters work most compared to the other
three
jobs. Looking at the bar chart more closely, one can see that underground drivers earned the largest amount of money at just under 50,000 pounds in the beginning year and slightly more than it after
three
years
, followed by firefighters at around 40,000 pounds. The number of salaries made by teachers was similar to those policies and nurses combined, at approximately 30,000 pounds in both
years
.
According to
the table, teachers and firefighters worked the longest by 55
hours
per week,
while
police did their job for 40
hours
on average. Meanwhile, working
hours
for nurses and underground drivers are quite similar at 38 and 36
hours
, respectively.
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