New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
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advantages
and disadvantages are discussed below.
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activity
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was
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changed
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today's
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activity
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activities
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apply
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increased
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people learn new things from it which is useful to both Correct article usage
apply
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people. Correct article usage
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on
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for
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activity
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activities
affact
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affect
there
body and health. Correct your spelling
their
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movments
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movements
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the past
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discuss
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discussed
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paragraph
advantage
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advantages
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the advantages
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