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The diagram illustrates tthe process of production of olive. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates tthe process of production of olive. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart represents the method of producing olive
oil
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.
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, it shows that there are 7 steps that need to be followed. The
oil
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 and water need to be stored separately.
Initially
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 , a person plucks a good olive fruit from a tree manually and rinses the olive with cold water in the rinsing machine.As a next step ,the olive is smashed using a machine and we get two products out of it, one is olive paste and the other is stones. In the fourth stage stuff the paste in the Bag with holes and place it in the pressing machine to extract the liquid. Once done with pressing move on to separating to make the usage of the product. By
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 phase, the
oil
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 will be divided into two products one in
oil
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 form and another in water source.
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, it will be stored in the warehouse and ready for sale.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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