This chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Walse between 1918 and 2011

This chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Walse between 1918 and 2011
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illustrates information about
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owned and rented households in
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two
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countries ,England and
Walse
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Wales
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from the period 1918 to 20011. from an
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perspective
it is evident that was
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a disparty
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disparty
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disparity
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proportion
of owned households and the rented
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,
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they have the same strong of growing but in different periods.
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the chart below we can see clearly that rented
houses
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increased
gardally
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gradually
over 70%in 1918,
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the
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number of owned
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houses
was
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in
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low
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rate it was over 20%,
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we can observed owned
houses
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up
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high
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level between 1991-2000
Whereas
, slightly decline at more 60% but it has sharply
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dropped
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30% ,So the owned
houses
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stood in the good
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figure
figures
at the end
of the time which
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allow
people to live in
owmned
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owned
houses
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