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Tourism has increased so much over the last 50 years that it is having a mainly negative impact on local inhabitants and the environment. However, others claim that it is good for the economy. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of tourism and give your own opinion?

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Tourism
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industry
 has
growed
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 so much over the
half century
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 that it is having a mainly
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detrimental effect on local
people
 and the ecosystem.
However
, others believe that it is good for the
economy
. In my opinion, the merits of
tourism
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industry
 outweigh the demerits, because
tourism
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industry
 can
boosts
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 the
economy
, and make
people
 more open-mind to accept
a new
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new cultures
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cultures
. On the one hand, there are several downsides
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tourism
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industry
on
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 local
people
 and the environment. Regarding local
people
, mass
tourists
 can put a lot of
strian
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strain
in
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 infrastructure, namely, roads, homes, and water supply.
Therefore
, mass
tourists
 can reduce the quality of basic services
provide
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for
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 local inhabitants. When it comes to the environment,
tourists
 often use cars or flights to transfer from
place
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one place
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 to
other
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, which means
increase
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 the air pollution result
of
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the overuseing
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overuseing
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overuse
overusing
 of cars or flights.
Consequently
,
tourism
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industry
 can create issues related to air contamination in local
area
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areas
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.
On the other hand
, I would like to argue the benefits of
tourism
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industry
significantly
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 more than
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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. The primary advantage of
tourism
enhance
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enhances
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 the
economy
 of the country. To illustrate,
tourists
 will spend money on hotels , public transport, and
tourists
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tourist
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 attractions, which
these money
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 can improve the
economy
 of
local
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the local
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conutry
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country
.
Furthermore
 will create more jobs opportunity and income for local
people
.
For instance
, thousands of local
people
 will work as, guided tours, waiters
on
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 hotels, and taxi drivers.
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 the gap between nations is another benefit of
tourism
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the tourism
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industry
. To put
in other words
, local
people
 will have
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to experience
a new
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new cultures
a new culture
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cultures
 through
communicate
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 with
tourists
.
As a result
, local
people
 will become more open-mind to accept other
cultures
 and backgrounds.
To sum up
,
For
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 my perspective, the upsides of
tourism
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the tourism
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industry
 outweigh the downsides, because
tourism
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industry
 can
boosts
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boost
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 the
economy
, and give local individuals
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to experience
a
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new
cultures
 and backgrounds.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative impact
  • local inhabitants
  • economy
  • boosts
  • cultural exchange
  • preservation
  • restoration
  • environmental degradation
  • overcrowding
  • strain
  • infrastructure
  • cultural dilution
  • commercialized
  • economic dependence
  • sustainable tourism
  • mitigate
  • adverse effects
  • regulation
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