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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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In recent years, there is a huge increase in the
preferance
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preference
 of purchasing a place to reside in
instead
 of hiring it because of some reasons
such
 as obtaining the desired privacy and the aim of a luxurious standard of living. I am a staunch believer that
this
 phenomenon has deleterious effects on some
specefic
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specific
 countries. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss the reasons and why I am of the belief that it is harmful to hold
such
 a point of view. To embark on, residents of some states discern that having one's own home is beneficial regarding privacy issues. To illustrate, individuals opt to buy houses to enjoy a private life without being disturbed by neighbours who sometimes have
innate
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 curiosity to know the details of others' movements.
For example
, in modern civilized cities, there are many
skyscrabers
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skyscrapers
 in which there is a plethora of flats on the same floor
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and
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 can lead to a sense of discomfort. Another reason for the skyrocketing percentages
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 residents buying and not renting is that they seek a
prestigeous
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prestigious
 level of life.
Thus
, it can be said that the previously mentioned culture contributed hugely to the upsurge of
prefering
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preferring
 living in one's own building.
Furthermore
, environmentalists and I believe that the spread of these thoughts among generations can lead to disasters like road congestion.
This
 means that the larger the number of buildings on
a
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land, the less spacious it is. An eminent example of
this
 is Cairo where dwellers suffer from overcrowded neighbourhoods,
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which led to the idea of constructing a new capital city.
Therefore
, these consequences should be put in mind when allowing any man/woman to
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 his/her piece of land.
After
this
 essay has manifested the points mentioned above, it can be reiterated that more private constructions result in more problems.
That is
 why I argue that there should be awareness campaigns to help citizens understand their indispensable role in
tacking
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 the country's problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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