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The chart below shows the different types of goods and services purchased online in Australia, Canada and the United Kingdom in one year. Summaries the the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the different types of goods and services purchased online in Australia, Canada and the United Kingdom in one year. Summaries the the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 provided chart illustrates that people bought various kinds of online goods and services in four different countries throughout the year.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the proportions of online items purchased by people in the United Kingdom were generally the highest except for toys and financial services.
To begin
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, the
ratio
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 of consumers who paid money to get books online was equal, at around 45%, in
Canada
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 and
Australia
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,
whereas
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 the
percentage
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 in the
UK
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 was elevated than the other two countries by about 20%.
Although
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 the proportion of populations who got computer equipment via online service was nearly equal in
Canada
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 and
Australia
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, there was a slight increase in the
ratio
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 in the
UK
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 compared to both of them.
In addition
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 to that the
percentage
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 of folks who purchased music online was nearly twice, at about 75% in comparison to
Canada
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 and
Australia
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.
However
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, the
percentage
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 of DVDs, Videos, and
food
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 and
drink
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 purchased online was greater, in the
UK
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 than in the others, The
ratio
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 of
food
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 and
drink
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 bought online was the lowest in the
UK
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. Regarding toys, financial services, and
food
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 and
drink
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, there was a fluctuation in online purchasing, where
Canada
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 represented the least
percentage
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 for
food
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 and
drink
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, but for
Australia
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, the lowest
ratio
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 was for toys.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words ratio, canada, australia, percentage, uk, food, drink with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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