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The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons

The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons
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The bar chart represents data about
achievement
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 of three
teams
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 A
B
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C
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 in different periods of time from 2002 to 2006. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, there
are
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 only one
team
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 which during all these years got the highest number of points it is
Team
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B
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.
However
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, other groups did not show
the
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stable results. In 2002,
team
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 A represented the lowest point ever (5
pt
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).
Team
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B
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 demonstrated the highest point (82
pt
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).
Team
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C
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 riches to 10
pt
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. In the next year
2003
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 the proportion of two
teams
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 increased.
Team
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 A grew on 6pt and
teams
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C
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 rose on 5pt.
In contrast
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,
Team
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B
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 decreased on 22pt. In 2004 the situation changed. The Number of points
Team
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 A soared significantly and riched 35pt.
Whereas
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,
teams
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B
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 and
C
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 continued to decline. In the following
years
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 the proportion of
Team
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 A dipped considerably.
Team
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C
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 decreased gradually.
While
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team
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B
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 went up and riched 55pt.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words teams, b, c, team, pt with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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