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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Many people today find it difficult to balance the demands of their work and personal life. What are the causes of this situation, and what can individuals and employers do to reduce the problem? You should give reasons for your answer, and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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It is argued that
people
 tend to choose well-paid
jobs
. But someone
find
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 it too hard to stabilize the
require
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requirements
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 of their job and private
life
.
This
 may lead to many
difference
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different
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situation
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situations
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 in the
daily-
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daily life
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life
.
Thus
 there are a lot of
solution
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solutions
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 that individuals or white-collar
jobs
 can do to decrease the issues.
To begin
 with, the serious problem is the increased workload that many
people
 have to deal with.
Initially
, the more amount of
job
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jobs
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, the more stress workers have suffered. Recently, office-related
jobs
 expect to stay longer and be available outside traditional working hours. Not only the convenience of
fixed
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time
 period but
also
 the long-term of the
work
.
Furthermore
, the rise of communication tools has accelerated the trend jump significantly in various fields of
works
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work
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.
Hence
people
 are always contactable.
Moreover
, the labour market
increasing
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increasingly
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 competitive to avoid economic recession and unemployment
rate
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rates
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.
For
this
 reason, workers are under pressure as the volume of
work
are
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is
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 too much.
As a result
, some employees feel fear
loss
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of loss
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 of promotion or redundancy if they resist.
For instance
,
people
work
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who work
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 in
office
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offices
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 that have competitive always
work
 at 100% they can so they often control the balance between personal
life
 and
work
.
On the other hand
, there are a lot of solutions that white-collar
jobs
 can apply to have a better
life
. To commence with, employers should clarify with their employees the
time
.
Therefore
, learning management skills is quite important for each
people
. When they
are expect
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are expected
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 to be free of
work
 and out of contact, they must ensure private
time
 and have some trips to relax.
However
, teenage now
priority
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prioritise
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 flexible
time
 because they can change their
time
 flex.
In addition
,
people
 ought to offer advice and coach
to
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apply
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staff in areas. One
clearly
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clear
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 example is more and more
people
 go to the techniques to ask for
the
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apply
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advice and most of them are stress control and relaxation techniques. In conclusion,
balance
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balancing
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the
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apply
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work
 and personal
life
 is very important
due to
 the amount of
job
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jobs
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 and
people
 don’t know how to manage their
time
. To get a high salary workers have to
work
 hard.
However
, they should care about their health.
Lastly
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 there have many
solution
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solutions
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 to reduce
this
 problem like
manage
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managing
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the
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apply
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time
,
control
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controlling
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 the stress
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