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Although parents are responsible for raising a child, outside influence plays a key role in their development. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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As the expanse of modernisation overhauls each sphere of life, the dynamics of upbringing have altered too. A section of
society
 vehemently deems that family is completely accountable for their child’s
development
,
whereas
 others believe that community
also
 plays
major
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 role in
development
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 f children. I evenly concur with both
view
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, let us unfurl both in subsequent paragraphs. Basically, there are a plethora of factors which evident that parents are
first
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teacher
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teachers
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 of every child and have
huge
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 influence on their growth. First and foremost,
mother
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mothers
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 and
father
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fathers
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 want to give accurate and significant knowledge to their offspring which they start from
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 young age by teaching them. To elaborate, a child
learn
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 how to speak, act, and respond to any situation
form
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from
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 their family members before going outside
,
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 because when a little
one
initiate
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 to interact with
society
, people want them to behave in a manner which they learnt at home. To exemplify, a survey conducted by the United States Census Bureau in 2008 in California over a group
200
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 parents revealed that 90% of youngsters behave in
community
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the community
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 what they learnt from their families and
this
 plays a vital role in their future. On the other side, there are several skills that
one
 can only learn from the public. Primarily, skills like
team work
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, cooperation, adjustment, and
way
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a way
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 to solve a situation can only be learned when
one
 starts to participate in
community
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the community
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. To dig deeper,
in
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home
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 everyone
have
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their
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 comfortable environment in which their parents
,
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 and siblings are present to help out
all
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 kind of issues,
whereas
 in public
one
 have to face own problems and solve them without any help which is a significant aspect of
development
 to be
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 solver.
Also
, outside of
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the house
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house
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 a child learns to be confident, and attentive to all
kind
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kinds
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 of reactions. To illustrate, Sir Sigmund Freud, an eminent psychologist in his study of human behaviour and cognitive skills, asserted that
children
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 growth starts from their home but
continue
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 and
finish
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 in
society
.
To conclude
, it can be said that
although
mother
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 and father are the main
person
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people
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 responsible for their heir
development
, the role of
society
 is
also
 vital and cannot be neglected.
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