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Some argues that IT has its negative impact more than positive impact. Discuss both aspects and give your opinion.

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By two groups of people, it is argued whether the negative impact outweighs the positive impact contained by IT or not. From my aspect, I opine that many merits turn up when using IT for various development. At first glance, it can't be denied that IT is a crucial section of one's life in
this
 day and age, on the flip side, it is usually brought for earning a lot of personal benefits. Not forgetting to mention that, a large percentage of countries tend to receive the benefits made by the technology in
this
 period of time.
For instance
,
last
 ten years, many banks' financial information are accessed in order to steal money for many personal reasons. To illustrate
further
, cyberbullying becomes a gigantic trouble occurring in a lot of mediums. It is sure that the one bullied is unsatisfied, and wants to find an exit.
However
, the exit does not appear many times. As we can see in the news, a good deal of people solve the problem by killing themselves.
On the contrary
, despite lots of troubles occurring,
this
 sort of knowledge is still used in effective ways, on top of that, the technologies are built and used in the new solution.
For example
, medical pieces of information are able to be brought from
this
 for patients' recovery, and the tendency of security increases,
that is
, it contains many benefits for humans.
To sum up
, a fair portion of crowds strive hard to discuss IT, from the examples mentioned, It obviously seems to me that the merits outweigh the drawbacks un arguably
as a result
 of real uses,
hence
, I strongly agree with the other group of crowds.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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