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The supplied bar chart shows the main spendings in the US, Canada, UK and Japan in 2009.

The supplied bar chart shows the main spendings in the US, Canada, UK and Japan in 2009.
The supplied bar chart shows the main
spendings
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spending
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 in the US, Canada,
UK
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the UK
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 and Japan in 2009. As
it
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is pointed out in the chart , the main expenditures consider five categories like
:
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 food, housing, transportation , health care and clothing. Now, turning to the details , it is noticeable that housing shows the
most high
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 figures, with an average
persentage
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percentage
just
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of just
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 about 20, in each country. In order to
that
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, in
US
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the US
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 it takes place more than in
the
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other places.
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, food and transportation are
also
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 with one of the high amounts, but not the same as housing.
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 these,
the
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welfare and clothing represent the lowest results ,compared with other things. The
numberof
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number of
moneyy
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money
that is
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 mostly spent on them is approximately 5%.
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, the US supplies pretty much a big average amount of money that had been spent on these five
expendituries
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expenditures
. Not only America
,
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 but
also
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 Japan.
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, the other two, Canada and UK , had a little less than them in 2009

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, besides".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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