More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. Do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

In
this
era of modernisation and globalisation, people are migrating from one nation to another to seek better job opportunities. Immigration and emigration has become
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pivotal decision
while
structuring future aims. Prosperous nations provide healthy lifestyles, competitive wages and incentives to attract qualified youth from under-developed or developing countries. Some believe that immigration should be limited to retain talent in
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country
while
others believe that everybody has
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freedom to take
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for
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and it is
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instinct to look for
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workplace. I would initiate my argument by laying some light on the reasons
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immigration.
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and foremost reason is
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the talent. Many graduates may take up engineering courses, fashion designing courses and mechanical courses as well. Their community or locality has next to no opportunities in the respective fields. Eventually, they are forced to immigrate to
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nations to demonstrate and manipulate their knowledge for the betterment. Impoverished nations, where the first priority is the provision of basic necessities like food, shelter and water, are incapable of providing competitive wages to
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highly skilled workers. A recent example came from my hometown, Punjab, where the provincial
government
has increased the fees for MBBS (Bachelor of
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and
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of
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) course by 80% by giving
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stipend.
Although
, fortunate graduates who manage to get a
government
job in
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, engineering and computing sectors are finding
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enticing.
However
, the less fortunate ones who lack inadequate
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for these jobs are forced to migrate. The counterargument of retaining the nation’s talent is
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contentious issue. In order to make a nation strong and prosperous, the
government
should invest in young graduates as they are tomorrow’s leaders, businessmen, doctors and engineers.
Nevertheless
, it is every citizen’s responsibility to work tremendously for the prosperity of
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nation and to bring it to the list of other developed countries.
Therefore
, they should contribute and aim tirelessly to achieve greater success for the country and its people as a whole. But without proper recognition and attractive wages from the
government
,
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of motivation inculcates among them. After a close analysis of both the arguments, I have come to
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conclusion that it is entirely a person’s own preference and decision.
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actions can influence these decisions by giving equal opportunities and better pay
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to qualified individuals.
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