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The maps below show the layouts of nature Museum between 2010 and 2013.

The maps below show the layouts of nature Museum between 2010 and 2013.
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The
map
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illustrate
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illustrates
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 below the layout of
nature
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the nature
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 Museum between 2010 and 2013 respectively. Generally, the Museum had a big change in the layout in
years
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the years
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of
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2010-2013. the biggest
changes
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change
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 was the garden at the far right
and
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which
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was
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were
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replace
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replaced
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other
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by other
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 sections.
At
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On
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 the Far Left of the
map
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, in 2011 the mammal section was replaced with
Ice
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the Ice
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age
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Age
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 series in 2013 and was moved to the right of the
map
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. To carry on,
inn
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in
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 2013 the insects was the newest collection
to
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 the museum it was located below the ice age section.
In addition
Linking Words
, the Ocean wall on the middle top of the
map
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 in 2013 became
more
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apply
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bigger than
2011
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in 2011
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. at the far right of the
map
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 respective for both 2010 and 2013, in 2013 the garden was
knock
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knocked
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 down and
cafe
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the cafe
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 and shops
was
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were
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 replaced.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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