The diagram below show two different processes for manufacturing balck tea.

The diagram below show two different processes for manufacturing balck tea.
The provided diagram illustrates the way in which to produce black
tea
. As can be seen from the image, there are some stages in the process, beginning with picking leaves and culminating in firing or drying. The beginning stage is picking fresh
tea
leaves. The way to make high-quality
tea
is to pick out only the bud and 2 top leaves. After that, the picked leaves need to be withered with an air of fans.
Then
, 60% of the moisture contained in leaves evaporates. In the subsequent stage, two different processes are divided, traditional and modern methods. The former method is rolling the leaves, and it will be flat and broken.
On the other hand
, the latter method is cutting the leaves, and it will be cut, torn and curled.
Next,
the leaves need to pass through oxidation or fermentation by spreading on tiles or cement. In the final stage, the leaves are fired in an oven or dried using hot air dryers.
Then
, flavour and aroma are released from the leaves.
Finally
, the black
tea
leaves vaporised in 97% of the moisture can be obtained.
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